Writers need to be more sparing with their usage of “future in the past” tense, e.g. “John left for the front; he would not return until five years later.” One such sentence can be useful, but if you end up writing most of your chronology that way it’s just awkward reading.
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It starts sounding like the Fates are narrating the story.
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wait that's a good take!
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